In the screenshot it took me a while to realize the intended way to read the piece was horizontally and not vertically but then I read the line "I dug my liquid veil when I married the night" and it added a whole new layer of understanding
To be honest, I had the same reaction when I was stretching out the lines and spaced and noticed how they formed new things and meanings. It was a fun experiment.
I really like the gif actually! :) I think gifs are underrated here. It might be fun to try a gif of poem.
The 90s internet nerd in me loves the Ascii Art, but it feels very Usenet. Maybe no one knows that that is.
I actually really liked the classical poem and I am kinda wondering if the spacing thing is a kind of fad. The last one versions were the best of the experiments I think.
This is a fire stanza:
I mourn not knowing sisterhood,
motherhood, stardom or light.
I mourn who I longed to be—
a mother in a land of fathers.
And it is impact is not there in the middle versions. The last one, I think it hits less.
I'm glad you did this! I for one, think something can have many versions. I don't really believe in the canonical version of a song for example. I often prefer the live version to the recording. So I think this can apply as well in poetry.
But hmmm, I think you did a great job of pushing this to an extreme. And now that you did, I'm questioning if I like it. :)
I’m only stating my own reaction, not dismissing an entire art form.
Something idk, gets lost in digital perhaps. Like a concrete poem in a spiral form works because you can rotate the book. On a phone, the stupid phone autorotates the image when you do.
And yet, there is something there.
In any case, full moon or not, this was very interesting to see and I’m glad you performed the experiment as a benefit to poet scientists everywhere.
Ah, my muse! You’ve done it again!
I love the experimentation on a meta level — and idek what that means. But if I had to explain, it’d be something like this:
The poem is like a child whose soul is twisted in the arms of a dejected mother.
You needed something to shatter and so it was, and so it was.
Story of my life 🙉
NOOOOOOOO (that’s hardcore but also) NOOOOOOO
This has a clean, retro-aesthetic charm. I think I heard a dot-matrix printer while reading it.
My first encounter with this style was through fiction, rather than poetry (House of Leaves).
I have written several poems like this, which I would like to share, but Substack is very unforgiving with copy/paste formatting:(
Omg… you unlocked memories with the printer… I can still hear it screeching in a 90s office.
I’ll help you edit it after a screenshot, I need to see someone else’s madwork. 👀
I dig the playing with formatting and making the poem visual
Yes, I was inspired by other people here playing with formatting and symbols. I treated this beautiful poem like play-doh and went all crazy on it.
It seems it pays to be mad sometimes. Thank you, Daniel 🙏🏻
"a mother in a land of fathers." You made this line really shine, very beautiful
Thank you, Benno. I think I’m decent at writing about paradoxes. 🖤
In the screenshot it took me a while to realize the intended way to read the piece was horizontally and not vertically but then I read the line "I dug my liquid veil when I married the night" and it added a whole new layer of understanding
To be honest, I had the same reaction when I was stretching out the lines and spaced and noticed how they formed new things and meanings. It was a fun experiment.
I really like the gif actually! :) I think gifs are underrated here. It might be fun to try a gif of poem.
The 90s internet nerd in me loves the Ascii Art, but it feels very Usenet. Maybe no one knows that that is.
I actually really liked the classical poem and I am kinda wondering if the spacing thing is a kind of fad. The last one versions were the best of the experiments I think.
This is a fire stanza:
I mourn not knowing sisterhood,
motherhood, stardom or light.
I mourn who I longed to be—
a mother in a land of fathers.
And it is impact is not there in the middle versions. The last one, I think it hits less.
I'm glad you did this! I for one, think something can have many versions. I don't really believe in the canonical version of a song for example. I often prefer the live version to the recording. So I think this can apply as well in poetry.
But hmmm, I think you did a great job of pushing this to an extreme. And now that you did, I'm questioning if I like it. :)
I didn’t know I could put GIFs as covers for posts until I saw it randomly on my feed. It’s really good for getting attention of readers in the feed.
Usenet was before my time, but I still got mIRC 😎
Might be fad, I just felt like destroying something. I went a little overboard 🤣🤣 I liked the micropoems on a personal level but definitely overkill.
In my defense, there was a full moon and I was left unsupervised🤭🤭🤭
I’m only stating my own reaction, not dismissing an entire art form.
Something idk, gets lost in digital perhaps. Like a concrete poem in a spiral form works because you can rotate the book. On a phone, the stupid phone autorotates the image when you do.
And yet, there is something there.
In any case, full moon or not, this was very interesting to see and I’m glad you performed the experiment as a benefit to poet scientists everywhere.
This awesome on so many levels
Very cool